Heart Crying

[سحر الليالي]

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Now that you re gone , I am trying not to cry .and I am asking my soul , heart ,why our love have to die?
I tired to safe our love ,tired night and day, but it gone now ,spread long alone ..!
I have a dream ,but it's been taken away ,far from my heart ,far from you..
All happy moment have to end , and every sun rise have to set..!
When night come , and stars take their place near the moon , and the wind blew so could …,we use to meet, and hold each other soul , heart…
But these days are gone forever ,forever now…!
I swear to you that you will be always and forever in my life ,even though for now we have got to say goodbye.
So what can I do ,what shall I say…????
Just praying peace always be upon you ,and god bless you wherever you go , whenever you been.
By :Manar

[محمد سمير السحار]

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Now that you re gone , I am trying not to cry .and I am asking my soul , heart ,why our love have to die?
I tired to safe our love ,tired night and day, but it gone now ,spread long alone ..!
I have a dream ,but it's been taken away ,far from my heart ,far from you..
All happy moment have to end , and every sun rise have to set..!
When night come , and stars take their place near the moon , and the wind blew so could …,we use to meet, and hold each other soul , heart…
But these days are gone forever ,forever now…!
I swear to you that you will be always and forever in my life ,even though for now we have got to say goodbye.
So what can I do ,what shall I say…????
Just praying peace always be upon you ,and god bless you wherever you go , whenever you been.
By :Manar

Dear my sister Manar
It is really honest and wonderful gasida
What a white heart do you have!
Your heart is whiter than the snow
Accept my best wishes and regards
Your brother
Mohammed Samir Alsahhar

[سارة محمد الهاملي]

دائماً مشاعرك رقيقة وجميلة يا سحر (تعودت على هذا اللقب.. يجب أن تغيري معرفك حتى يعترف عقلي باسمك الحقيقي). أشعرتني كلماتك وكأنك زهرة رقيقة وبريئة في البرية.

I just have some corrections to make to your song as there are some printing errors. I hope you do not mind my nosiness. You see, I am a teacher and this runs in my blood D:

tired = tried
moment = moments
come = comes
use = used
these = those (تشير إلى البعيد .. تلك الأيام)

Thank you very much for your patience.

[سحر الليالي]

Dear Brother"Mohammed":
Many thanks for passing by and your wonderful Encouragement
But sir i thought that it a prose more than a gasida, don' you think so....?
any way ,i really do appreciate your passing
Thank you so :0014: much
Please Accept my best Regards and Thanks

[سحر الليالي]

Dear sis " Sara":

I really do appreciate your corrections . Please do it alwayes.

you are alwayes welcome

And i really thankful for your lovelly words

With all my love

[ربيحة الرفاعي]

رقة وعذوبة وحرف دامع ومؤثر

وبعض أخطاء شابت اللغة وددت لو أنك راجعته لتفاديها

تحيتي

[ماهر يونس]

Oh my God!
The gasida is full of mistakes it makes me wounder why you even wrote it in English!
Starting with the title which is completely wronge..You should say Crying Heart not the other way around. Because in English you should put the adjective before the noun..This is the simplest rule in syntax!!
Despite of all the syntactical errors that have been corrected by Sarah, you still have many many mistakes..
.and!! Should be in a capital letter. Each line in English gasidas should start with a capital letter.
Our love have to die!! It should be has to die. Because love is uncountable noun even if with the use of our.
To safe!! Save not safe because it is a verb.
It gone now= it is gone now.
Spread long alone!!! What on God's name you mean by that!!?
I have a dream but it's been taken away!! Then you should say I had a dream since it has been taken, right?
Dear Sahar there are so,so many mistakes after that you are hurting the language.Please do revise and revise before you puplish.
The emotions in the gasida are great..The tone is set perfectly but your mistakes are so much to handle!
Do not stop writing in English but please respect the language!

[رسول عبد الله]

Oh my God!
The gasida is full of mistakes it makes me wounder why you even wrote it in English!
Starting with the title which is completely wronge..You should say Crying Heart not the other way around. Because in English you should put the adjective before the noun..This is the simplest rule in syntax!!



Wronge ? //// wrong

You should say Crying Heart not the other way,

What about The Paradise lost?, the adjective followed the noun.

Thank you.

[احمد خلف]

Dear Brother"Mohammed":
Many thanks for passing by and your wonderful Encouragement
But sir i thought that it a prose more than a gasida, don' you think so....?
any way ,i really do appreciate your passing
Thank you so :0014: much
Please Accept my best Regards and Thanks

To whom it may concern;
This piece isn't agasida and that was said by the writer herself

will U kindly see above

[ماهر يونس]

Wronge ? //// wrong

You should say Crying Heart not the other way,

What about The Paradise lost?, the adjective followed the noun.

Thank you.


first of all، you are right its wronge..and thanks for correcting my reply!
Second, She has to say The crying heart and uses "The" for an adjective to come before the noun like your given example!‎‏ ‏

[رسول عبد الله]

first of all، you are right its wronge..and thanks for correcting my reply!
Second, She has to say The crying heart and uses "The" for an adjective to come before the noun like your given example!‎‏ ‏
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[رسول عبد الله]

first of all، you are right its wronge..and thanks for correcting my reply!
Second, She has to say The crying heart and uses "The" for an adjective to come before the noun like your given example!‎‏ ‏

As I know in English language, an adjective can be followed or preceded by a noun which modifies, am I right !?
About the article (the) you are right , she had to use it , but sometimes some of the writers used to impact the readers by using such titles.